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This is the story of a girl who comes across a mysterious dead body in her house.
A short horror amateur film made by young schoolers.
Story: A boy gets interesting texts from her sister. He wants to figure out what she means, so starts to find out.
Title: Can do much better
Pros: I liked the setting and general layout of scenes
Cons: there were a lot of continuity jerks and the entire concept wasn`t up to the mark
Other Thoughts: you guys can do much beter...all the best.
Title: work on your story
Pros: you have ideas but you should build on them more to make a complete storyline
Cons: poor acting and story doesn`t make a whole lot of sense
Other Thoughts: keep working on it and have fun
Title: Keep Making Stuff
Pros: Actually making films at your age. (Seriously)
Cons: The number 1 thing is your story. It doesn`t make sense, because why would a girl or anyone find a dead body and just continue to look around their house? I`m not trying to be harsh. I really don`t see why the girl would scream and then look around. Wouldn`t she just run back out the house? Call the cops? It looks like you jumped into shooting without really thinking about if your story made sense and if the characters reaction was realistic. I know characters in horror films make bad choices but for a young girl to not immediately run or continue screaming or do anything other then calmly look around the house seems far fetched even for the horror genre. Again I`m not trying to be mean, I just want to give things to think about.